Jiwon

All people live in advanced technology nowadays. Many people know how much technology improved but they do not know how it gives many unfavorable condition in the world. Technology has made the world a worse place to live in many cases.

-First, technology has disadvantage in a war. As time goes by, there are more wars. To protect own countries, whole countries try to make new stong weapons for warfare. A long time ago, people only used sword, fire, and refles in battles. Today, many countries use bomb that kill plenteous civilians at once. Since many countries make more new powerful weapons to protect themselves, more people die in each war. 

-Second, technology has aggravated the environment. To prosper own country, many countries cut trees to make area to build buildings. This made environment in harm. Also, the world produces exorbitant cars since it has made people easy to move people from one place to the other. This made people to use more gas and that cause the air pollution. Because people try to make the world better place, it made bad environment.

In conclusion, technology has made the world worse by making more weapons and making environment worse.

tpqr11:

1. Elp students are not satisfied with their classes and levels.

         1.      ELP officer should conduct surveys and find problems and then examine what students want to learn.

         2.     ELP should makes another test such as placement test and Ielts (make sure students get right levels)

2. Most students state that pronunciation is not helpful to them

         1. hire many American teachers (one on one)

         2. make more recording systems.

         3. tutor.

3.Some students think that ELP advisor is not helpful to get information or when they change their schedules

         1. They should make specific programs that help the international stduetns, and they analyze what students have the problems.

         2.Elp office hires more advisors that can give studetns many opportunities to get information or whent they change their schedules.

 Your outline organized well but you missed references and also you should include what objections people can make of your solutions. Then, you can argue or explain what you will do to solve problems from people’s objections.

            Many people think that the global warming is not too dangerous but it became a big problem. The global warming causes many natural disasters such as hurricanes, the rise in sea level, and floods. Every year, more than 160,000 people dies world widely cause of the side effects of climate changes, which bring a problem. Therefore, I decided to survey variety people opinion to gather information to make improvement of the global warming.

Problem1: Most of people do not recognize how dangerous the global warming is.

Solutions1: We can post information about how dangerous the global warming is on the internet.

Objection: many people already know about the global warming. Also, there are advertise about it but still some people do not care about it. So how can you spread information effectively

Solutions2: we can advertise about the global warming’s dangerous effects to large associations and large communities, such as church, universities, and schools

Objection: who will pay for advertising?

Solutions3: we can write a letter many times about how dangerous the global warming to U.N(Ban Ki-moon)secretary counselor

Objection: whether or not your letter will come to him when he has a lot of things to do for our world

Problem2: Global warming become a serious problem

Solutions1: reduce the use of electricity

Objection: how? What specifically can people do? How will you get people to reduce use of electricity

Solutions2: According to green house effect, the percentage of CO2 increase, people can reduce use of burning of vegetable matter or not use the product of the combustion of fossil fuels.

Solutions3: reduce of Freon gas to protect the ozone layer

Objection: green energies are sometimes expensive and hard to produce.(Tony)

Reference

http://www.ncdc.noaa.gov/oa/climate/globalwarming.html#q1

http://www.worldviewofglobalwarming.org/

http://library.thinkquest.org/CR0215471/global_warming.htm

http://environment.about.com/od/globalwarmingandhealth/a/gw_deaths.htm

I agree that classmates are a more influence than than parents on a child’s sucess in school.

1. Classmates know school sytem than parents do.

Every time students have a problem in school, they always can ask classmates. For instance, one person do not know what courses he or she can take. Then, he can ask classmates what courses are good and who are suitful teacher for one subject. By taking recommandation from classmates, students can sucess to a better condition in school.

2. Classmates can help directly but parents can not.

If there is a group project, parents can not help a child. Even though they can tell their child how to do it, they can not actually help making a project because it can only done with people in a group.

3. Classmates have more information than parents do.

When there are assignments, a student always can ask his/her classmates about assignments significantly such as due dates and pattern how an assignment should organized.

In conclusion, classmates is helpful and infuencial on a child’s sucess in school.

yeajin:

: Universities should require students to take classes in many subjects for three reasons.

1.The mine(?) purpose of universities is TO GIVE a opportunity to accumulate knowledge of all students. Students try to learn more by taking classes. However, some students want to take classes only what they want. This will not help to collect their knowledge in many ways(WHAT WAYS?). Therefore, universities should require students to take classes in many subjects.

2. students will be given more options to choose their futures(YOU MEAN MAJOR?). If students take many different subjects, they will realize what they really want to do in the future. While they are learning, they will find which is good or which is not good for themselves.

3.It will give them wide sence(?) by taking many subjects. People do not know what is going to happen in the future. If students learn as much as they can, they will know MUCH information and they can apply to their real lives when they need.     

You points out three points well. Also, organization and structure of the essay is good.

A city should try to preserve its old, historic buildings by not destroying it.

One reason we have to keep old building is because it represents the beauty of own country. For example, there are tourists to see and feel many architecture by traveling other countries. If many historical buildings were replaced by modern buildings, threre will be no tourists. It stops many people from learning other cultures.

Another reason we have to keep and preserve old and historical buildings is because buildings are one of essential elements that scientists observe. The design, pattern, artifacts, and all the remains from the old buildings are all significant to archaeologists. Therefore, the historic buildings are important to some people because it remind them lives of the past.

desiapig:

What do you think the characterisitics of a good class? First of all, I think a good class participates in class well. Students must participates in class to show willing to learn. Although, a good class behaves and follows rules in class such as does all the homework on time and prepare for the tests. Other important characteristics of a good class is respect classmates and teachers in class. Students and teachers had better respect each other and each other’s opinions to be have a good class.

 Good thing is that you point out the detail and the reason of your each point you are making. One of mistakes you made is that you have to write complete sentence after “although.”

To be a good class, students and teachers should get along with each other. To make it happen, students should participate in a class. Both students and teachers should follow general rules and expect each other. Teachers should have a little bit of humor which would make students have interests and make students participate in a class.